Personally speaking, I am on the level of three for this food essay.
The main reason is that my thesis is too long and too specific, and is not concise. Although my topic sentences are all about my thesis, but I feel like they are not coherent enough. Besides that, my essay is organized, and each reason for why I love rice noodles is very clear.The sentences and description is very detailed. Another thing that I need to improve is my use of words. I should probably use some words that aren't very common .
The main reason is that my thesis is too long and too specific, and is not concise. Although my topic sentences are all about my thesis, but I feel like they are not coherent enough. Besides that, my essay is organized, and each reason for why I love rice noodles is very clear.The sentences and description is very detailed. Another thing that I need to improve is my use of words. I should probably use some words that aren't very common .
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